great so far !!! one thing i noticed though: sometimes the pronouns mess up. so far i have selected myself, simon, and theodore to be guys, but i still see a few times where one of them or myself is referred to as her. thx
I LOVE EVERYTHING ABOUT THIS I've always loved stories set in palaces with nobility and stuff, so I'm really looking forward to this one! The writing is lovely, and the start also seems promising, so I'm very excited for the next update!
Thanks so much for making this! I love it so far! I wanted to let you know that we've mentioned it in our list of recommended Twine stories. But if that's not okay just let me know. You can view it here, let us know if there are any other details we should add for your title --> https://itch.io/t/1763600/twine-games-with-character-customization-part-1
There are a few typo here and there that you should check again, not so much that it will be hard to understand though. But besides that, the story is really good!
The plot is amazing 🤩 just one thing ; pronounces for simone and theodora often change between he and she please fix this it feels wierd that characters change gender each line
I am already in love with this. I just wanted to let you know that in the second part of the prologue, when you're in the kitchen, it doesn't keep the pronoun of Simon. You're talking to him, but then it says 'she shakes her head...' instead of 'he'. Other than that, everything else looks good!! :D
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Hm, someone know if there will be a update one day ?
this is so cool!! can't wait to learn how the story will progress!!!
holy shit this was so cool
This is so good ....can't wait for more ;_;
great so far !!! one thing i noticed though: sometimes the pronouns mess up. so far i have selected myself, simon, and theodore to be guys, but i still see a few times where one of them or myself is referred to as her. thx
I LOVE EVERYTHING ABOUT THIS I've always loved stories set in palaces with nobility and stuff, so I'm really looking forward to this one! The writing is lovely, and the start also seems promising, so I'm very excited for the next update!
Thanks so much for making this! I love it so far! I wanted to let you know that we've mentioned it in our list of recommended Twine stories. But if that's not okay just let me know. You can view it here, let us know if there are any other details we should add for your title --> https://itch.io/t/1763600/twine-games-with-character-customization-part-1
I like what I have read as of yet and look forward to when I can read more
There are a few typo here and there that you should check again, not so much that it will be hard to understand though. But besides that, the story is really good!
The plot is amazing 🤩 just one thing ; pronounces for simone and theodora often change between he and she please fix this it feels wierd that characters change gender each line
I am already in love with this. I just wanted to let you know that in the second part of the prologue, when you're in the kitchen, it doesn't keep the pronoun of Simon. You're talking to him, but then it says 'she shakes her head...' instead of 'he'. Other than that, everything else looks good!! :D
Another thing I noticed. In the gardens there's a spot where it says "yet the $mctitle makes no move". $mctitle is not declared.
I can't wait for more!
Oo! It's a really nice start! I like to play more of it!^^